The Eyes of Texas:"Out With the Old, in With the New"

It’s really great to see a writer compose a statement with such passion and voice about their opinion having such great desire to share with the audience. However, an introduction with such strength can sometimes be perceived as ignorance by the audience and therefore you will only be left with half of the ears that you started off with. It’s good to show passion in writing but the audience must be captured first which means your strength in voice must be strongest in the middle of the statement so that the audience is at least slightly swayed towards your justifications. In my opinion, this serves great importance because voiced belief with no willing listeners is nothing more than a conjecture.

The diction choice could be toned down a bit as well going back to the fact of reaching to the audience. I definitely am not one to one to whine about everyone’s feelings, however, I think respect must be shown to others to provide some sort of validity towards your statements and respect towards your opinion as well.

Another way to appeal to the audience is to acknowledge the fact that they are doing at least something right. Enclosure to one’s own opinion and failing to recognize theirs as somewhat valid will definitely lose a couple more ears that you need to lend.

Despite that, I really like the added solution within the statement because even some blogs are all accusations with no solutions. This really allows readers to see your perspective much better when you’re being proactive about the problem that you yourself are presenting. On a contrary note about the previous statement about diction, I like the power in the words that you present that not only raises awareness towards the problem but also could incite them into making a difference in their environment. The conclusion is good as well in serving its purpose which is to allow the audience to reminisce about the information they have just received and make a decision on whether or not to act on the issue.

Overall, the commentary was pretty good in serving somewhat the purpose of a blog which is to voice one’s opinion. It could have been a little bit more informative and a bit less one-sided but other than that good commentary.